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I'm a pretty easy-going guy. I write some intense stuff, but I've gone through a lot and writing is a really good way for me to get my emotions out. I'm a little crazy, and a little messy, but I know how to have a good time. I'm chill and go with the flow on most things. Shoot me a friend request at any point, I'm down to get to know anybody. I love getting to know new people and reading some really awesome stuff on this site. Before I found Stories Space, I didn't have an outlet for my writing, so this community has meant so much to me.

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Jason Edwards
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Gemini
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Interests:
skiing, hiking, hanging out, playing soccer (yes I know it's football everywhere else), watching sports, reading
Favorite Books:
Ender's Shadow, Harry Potter (all but especially the 2nd and 7th), Anna Karenina, Catcher in the Rye, To Kill a Mockingbird
Favorite Authors:
J.K. Rowling, J.D. Salinger, Harper Lee, Ernest Hemingway, Leo Tolstoy
Favorite Movies:
the Avengers. Iron Man. pretty much any movie from Marvel's cinematic universe. Harry Potter (duh.) Love Jennifer Lawrence so the Hunger Games was sick. Olympus has Fallen and White House Down. confession: I liked Pitch Perfect. shhhhh....
Favourite TV Shows:
Grey's Anatomy, 24, Graceland, Law and Order (SVU and regular), Criminal Minds
Favorite Music:
Rap (Eminem, Childish Gambino, The Game, 2Pac, some of Kanye's earlier stuff) and a guilty pleasure is pop. I also like some alt rock and heavy metal, but only a niche part of those. I can tolerate electronic dubstep too.

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Topic: Last 2 Letters
Posted: 22 Dec 2016 00:09

editorial - alienation

Topic: Word Association Game
Posted: 22 Dec 2016 00:08

Borrow - steal

Topic: Word Association Game
Posted: 18 Dec 2016 23:15

Composite - compound

Topic: Change One Letter
Posted: 19 Nov 2016 19:15

Keeps - Peeps

Topic: What's your current mood?
Posted: 29 May 2016 21:10

It's that inbetween state where you're too tired to do anything but not tired enough to sleep

Topic: Writing Help.
Posted: 28 May 2016 22:40

You're welcome. I mean, the thing about things being mysterious is that we humans are a bit dumb. If you just use phrases we're not really aware of, or phrases that sound educated, we'll probably think the prophecy is quite imaginative. And if it rhymes - oof. For some reason, rhyming makes us think of godliness, holiness, imagination...
I mean, here's an idea - that you absolutely have no obligation to use.

"A princess from the ruling line
Shall mark herself with blood and wine
Her power flows from holy keep
The doves and flowers will weep and weep."

Change the language as needed to fit your story, but let me know if that's kind of what you're looking for. I may have more examples that could help you, if you'd like them.
Cheers,
Jase


Also: That is obviously not a final product, I just wanted to see if that was kind of the structure you were looking for.

Topic: Would You Like to Carry on an Intelligent Conversation with the Poster Above You?
Posted: 24 May 2016 19:51

I would love to listen to and maybe learn from the above.

Topic: Writing Help.
Posted: 24 May 2016 19:47

Great post, Sherzahd.
To add a note, I've never dabbled much in fantasy in terms of long stories, which sounds like something you are planning to write. Prophecies, if used correctly, can be an aid to a strong fantasy story - but the problem lies when the prophecy drives the story.
Your prophecy isn't BAD, per say, but it's quite direct. I already know a) There will be a princess of the Lascher line and she will be the last in her line b) She will become the first "bonded queen" which admittedly is a phrase I do not know yet without the context of your story, but I can easily assume it is some sort of power c) Her rule will be historical in the sense that "great changes" will come; I already know she's going to be special d) Some sort of religious figure will have chosen her; she is a divine choice and d) She will have either a tattoo of doves and flowers on her back, or that will be a metaphor.

See how much I know? I can already almost predict the plot - either a girl who doesn't know she's a princess will find out she's actually the last princess of her line, she'll become a special queen, bring about lots of changes because a God-figure has chosen her. Or, a princess will end up being the last in her line, become a special queen, yadda yadda yadda.

You want an air of mystery around your story. The prophecy should be less direct, I feel, for it to be powerful. I shouldn't know what at least half of the terms mean, and I definitely shouldn't be able to guess any major plot points. Additionally, I think rhyming would help here. I think a prophecy that is a bit muddled and confuses the reader - not too much, mind you, but enough - is much more powerful.

Down to the nitty gritty - note these are all personal opinions based on my writing style and if you write differently/disagree that's totally great.

I think your prophecy should have more flowery language. Think about it. This is kind of the one time that it's really allowed in writing. Go for it! Something that sounds cool instead of "cover," for instance: "Doves will spiral across her ashen flesh." You can change that adjective to match your character, flesh may sound too violent, and it may sound that she is dead, but I feel that will be more intriguing to your reader.

I mean, CS Lewis is a master, but a prophecy I've never forgotten from a fantasy book is the famous:

"Wrong will be right, when Aslan comes in sight,
At the sound of his roar, sorrows will be no more,
When he bares his teeth, winter meets its death,
And when he shakes his mane, we shall have spring again.
When Adam's flesh and Adam's bone,
Sits at Cair Paravel in throne,
The evil time will be over and done" (CS Lewis, Narnia)

The reason this is so memorable and powerful, to me, is because it's very vague. We don't know Aslan, we don't know what winter represents, Adam's flesh and Adam's bone could refer to any human, we don't know what Cair Paravel is nor why the throne is important. We do know there's a lion named Aslan and he's going to save everyone, but we know nothing of the who, when, why, or how.
Also, it rhymes. Kind of. It doesn't need to be a Walt Whitman level poem but it helps with the flow.

I'm sorry I couldn't help more, but i hope something I've said will be useful.

Topic: Places Around the World
Posted: 20 Jan 2016 20:59

Edinburgh

Topic: Last 2 Letters
Posted: 19 Jan 2016 18:19

Amiable

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Ever Since New York

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The Men America Left Behind

Land of the brave… home of the free? That’s not quite right, but he’s not a mind for details. The whiskey slurs and slops in his stomach like a bad dream. American flag shorts. Unemployment lines color his future. The men America left behind sit huddled in the truth of their own misery. While gold litters the streets of the coastal elites, there is nothing left for them in the Rust Belt....

Added 16 Nov 2016 | Category Micro Fiction | Votes 8 | Avg Score 5 | Views 187 | 5 Comments

Kayla

He loved Kayla in the way one loves a small child or an injured puppy. He loved her, not because she was the right girl for him, but because he was the right one for her. He loved her because she was magnetic with gossamer wings and because on Mondays she smelled like Chanel No. 5 and roses and he loved her because he was supposed to, which is really no kind of love at all. Perhaps, he...

Added 17 Aug 2016 | Category Flash Fiction | Votes 10 | Avg Score 4.7 | Views 393 | 8 Comments

Nacht

The sky sat in judgment on a cold spring morning. All the people could be seen staring out of their empty shells, shells that housed warm souls and harbored dark thoughts, translucent in the light of day but opaque at night. If there is one thing I have learned, it is that night masks the deeds of day. It erases evidence and lays false trails for madmen to wander. It creates stories from air...

Added 29 May 2016 | Category Micro Fiction | Votes 7 | Avg Score 4.86 | Views 321 | 6 Comments

when a girl meets a boy

Disclaimer: For all of those reading this who do not identify as heterosexual, this poem is about you too. Just replace the pronouns with whatever is relevant to you, and hopefully, enjoy.  when a girl meets a boy there is a moment when they are truly equal. before biology sets in and reminds him to flex reminds her to push out her chest reminds them that they are made to...

Added 12 May 2016 | Category Poetry | Votes 7 | Avg Score 4.86 | Views 316 | 4 Comments

Of Copper and Strawberries

War is not beautiful. The reality of true hopelessness, of true fear, of the way a man turns when he’s faced with his own mortality has almost no redeeming qualities. The way God only appears within His soldiers at the moment they die, the tan sandy color of dust and utter demolition, the white flakes that fall from chapped, shredded skin does not interest the eye. There is no love...

Added 18 Feb 2016 | Category General | Votes 8 | Avg Score 5 | Views 298 | 6 Comments

Editor's Pick In the Dark

“Are you afraid of the dawn?” she asks, watching him with a half-smile on her face as he scrambles around the room, frantically pulling down the curtains. The new darkness bathes them both in soft candlelight. It smoothes out her angular lines and eases the sharpness of his jaw. But even gentle light cannot take the edge off a soul, and he grinds his teeth, while her nails tap out a...

Added 19 Jan 2016 | Category Flash Fiction | Votes 14 | Avg Score 4.64 | Views 486 | 12 Comments

Half-Lives

It’s kind of quiet and peaceful, but not a good quiet. Not like a tranquil, Japanese garden kind of quiet. This is the eye of the hurricane, the calm before the storm; like the calm before everything you know disintegrates into ash and vanishes before your eyes. I enter my house warily, footsteps as quiet as I can make them, my hand inside my jacket clutching my penknife. Just in case. The...

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Added 08 Dec 2015 | Category Poetry | Votes 7 | Avg Score 5 | Views 337 | 8 Comments

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