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The Pass
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fuzzy1954

The Pass

As we came into the valley


The Pass

This was an extreme winter for the small village tucked away in a valley.

All the old farmers knew in the fall by looking at the horses growing thick coats, squirrels gathering nuts running to and fro looking into the sky. Day after day wagon after wagon loaded with firewood snaked thru the pass.

The elders gathered the villagers and had them bend on one knee to pray.

"We give our lives into your safe keeping," they all prayed to Him, looking into the northern sky as light snow drifted down on their heads.

And it snowed and snowed with out a break for 39 days. The village turned into lumps of winter white.

On the 40th day the sun did break thru. People stuck their heads out like prairie dogs on the plains.

A breath of relief spread like wildfire thru the village. And then the unthinkable happened ...

As the villagers rang the bells in the church, a low rumble from the north, building speed. A wall of snow from the mountain tops came, taking all before it rolling over and thru the valley. Within mere minutes the small village was gone.

As the news broke in the big city a rescue party did form. The rescue party moved out and arrived at the pass in the morning, and they saw this one lonely snow crocus.

For spring was coming to the pass early this year.

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Comments(6)

redrandi
Posted 08 Feb 2013 11:08
Wonderful! Such a great story. How can such a short story have so much 'story' in it? Surprised, but sad.
CKAcres
Posted 05 Feb 2013 06:16
Twists and turns, reminds me of the Donner Party and the winter they spent. Great work.
Don
Posted 03 Feb 2013 08:05
The ending was set up nicely...not"fluff" at all
rolandloops
Posted 03 Feb 2013 06:41
That was unexpected. You mislead us with your tags. I loved it. The story was great and the sneaky way you set me up allowed the surprise at the end to catch me totally unaware. Thanks, I don't get that feeling often enough.
sea
Posted 03 Feb 2013 06:05
Carl you do so well with all genre, Isadora is right you do have knack for details. Loved the story...is there more to it? waiting
Isadora
Posted 03 Feb 2013 01:25
You have such a knack for unexpected turns and twists to your tales. I never imagine how they will end. Nice work.
 

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