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Abandoned

Tags: house, alone, death
The opening verse to a story I revised for publication
A house on rocky shores it was,
A broken-hearted place;
Stone walls etched with memories,
That time cannot erase.

Where once there was a glowing hearth
Of warmth and billowing smoke,
Now all that's left are cold and dust,
No one its fires to stoke.

As wind blows through its rafters
On quiet nights like these,
You'll hear its timbers’ sad lament
Carried across darkened seas.

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Comments(11)

HK4167
Posted 23 Jan 2013 13:48
Such beautiful words...
sitting
Posted 29 Oct 2012 06:34
"...memories That time cannot erase" I love that line! Brilliant!
Kiki
Posted 21 Aug 2012 15:57
Beautiful Words... You can see and feel everything that is not said but is there... Poetry at its best! x
Sisyphus
Posted 14 Aug 2012 18:48
such a lovely, haunting poem. I love the line, "a broken hearted place" and the "timbers sad lament."
LauraLee_Sweetness
Posted 12 Aug 2012 22:13
how poignant
bear_hug_giver
Posted 12 Aug 2012 14:02
Beautifully melancholy, a place drenched in memories, a vision only in the mind.
Jaymal
Posted 12 Aug 2012 13:10
Powerful sharp-etched images, full of heart and poignancy. Very precisely and effectively crafted poem. Nice work, Sherzahd.
Rascal
Posted 12 Aug 2012 10:55
You never disappoint.
Hotstuff
Posted 12 Aug 2012 07:54
Beautiful and very moving..
ianthomas
Posted 12 Aug 2012 04:22
All wrecks can be restored with enough care and attention, so that the memories can remain but be held afresh in a home of hope and love.
Tsk, the lyricism is catchy, it's a beautifully framed and shaped snapshot of a moment in time.
CKAcres
Posted 12 Aug 2012 03:33
Yas, Captivating, amazing how a house can display it's past.
Thanks for sharing.
 

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