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Are You Proud?

I'm sorry, Dad, that I'm such a disappointment. This is me.
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I'll never be the perfect girl,

Never be the one to get straight A's

Never the one to go and go until

I'm defeated

I guess I should be sorry,

But I can't say that I am,

I'm doing my absolute best,

Why can't you see that?

I'm tired,

my feet are dragging on the ground

I'm worn,

too many... too many emotions,

grades,

words,

thoughts,

things to-do...

too much... too much of you.

I'm sorry,

sorry I can't take all this,

sorry I can't do fifty billion things

like you did,

sorry...

Sorry I'm not your perfect daughter.

Can you say... just one time...

Are you proud?

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sea
Posted 11 Jan 2013 00:51
I want words how difficult could it be to say "i am proud of you?"!
I am sure lLanne wants the words too.
and Leanna well done! i loved this work of yours.

HK4167
Posted 10 Jan 2013 19:18
The emotion is very well expressed...as a dad, your poem reminds me to tell my kid that he did a good job and encourage him...

Dreamcatcher
Posted 10 Jan 2013 09:19
As a Dad I can tell you this.. it was never criticism.. it was encouragement.. we don't always say it right.. or explain ourselves enough.. forgive us for our many shortcomings.. but never doubt our hearts aren't full of love.. of course he was proud of you.. we all are..

frogprince
Posted 31 Dec 2012 14:09
What a beautiful lament about how you felt in not being able to fulfill dad's expectations. So often parents express disappointment but never let you explain. As a parent it was hard to not voice that. When you are working your butt off. Well done.
 

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