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Quote by Rumple_deWriter
Two characters having a conversation would not involve POV shifts (head hopping) unless the narrative includes what they're thinking.

With the exception of the romance genre, most agents, editors and reviewerslook down on 'head hopping' since it can easily confuse the reader about who is the current POV character.

IMO, it can be done effectively (see some of Poppet's work) but using it can be tricky and is, IMO, best avoided. .



Thank you, Rumple, I do my very best to make it clear without littering my stories with POV mentions or asterisks.

I've never had anyone come to me and tell me my work was confusing or slowed their reading down. It can be done. It just needs to be done right, as Sherz said.
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You know how I write, I do it like you, because I think using asterisks in stories is distracting. It makes me focus on them, instead of flowing with the reading. Unless you're 'new' to reading, it's not hard to tell who is saying what, where. There is no need for asterisks. Especially if it goes back and forth throughout the story between the readers. What an eyesore to see asterisks through the whole story. It's kind of like seeing lint, it makes you want to pick it off and get rid of it. Distracting little things that make you want to stare at them and pick them off. Make sense? I think so. I'm with you.
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In the arms of the one she loves.
She knows he is hers.
He tells her so, every night.
It makes her smile, and even blush.
Does she deserve someone like him?
It makes her wonder, but in the end.
She knows she does.
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Today I feel feisty, because I'm never going to give up.
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In a relationship sense? If I had to really be honest, it would be my ex Sean. He told me everything I wanted to hear, and crushed me. I've been on a tale spin of failed relationships since him.

Who was your first crush?
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I would like to be someone, anyone from another country, to know what it's live to like somewhere else other than America.
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Sneaks in to take it as Loops talks about forum counting.
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Since I usually write in first person, the main character is usually “me” in some form, so yes. Even if it’s not the main character I do.

However, I’ve never gone as far as you have in your random moments, but knowing how I feel about your story since I’m a fan, I can relate.

I grew attached to them, as much as you have. I think a real writer here on this site, a proper author, or even someone who makes films, should and would feel this way. I’d think anyways. I know I would, and do.
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I made stuffed Haddock, with home made crab rangoon, with corn. I made brownies for dessert.