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Welcome onboard the good ship, StoriesSpace, Robert. Maggie's suggestion is a good one, but there are many other possibilities, for instance: (
HEAD TILTED BACK,) Magin examined the cloud formation through the glass wall of the sky bridge. (WITH THE BANNISTER SUPPORTING HER WEIGHT) she pressed her ear to the window to try and hear the sound that made the water droplets dance. FINGERNAILS DUG INTO THE BANNISTER'S RAILING. THE WHITENESS OF HER KNUCKLES mirrored THE PALLOR OF HER FACE. She burried her finger nails into the banister and her knuckles turned the same pale white as her face now became.
Granted, none of those examples will ever win a Pulitzer, but maybe they can give you some ideas for varying the first word of sentences from names and pronouns.
IMHO, if the paragraphs all occur in the same scene with the same character, there's no obligation to begin them with the character's name.
Best of luck with your writing.
HEAD TILTED BACK,) Magin examined the cloud formation through the glass wall of the sky bridge. (WITH THE BANNISTER SUPPORTING HER WEIGHT) she pressed her ear to the window to try and hear the sound that made the water droplets dance. FINGERNAILS DUG INTO THE BANNISTER'S RAILING. THE WHITENESS OF HER KNUCKLES mirrored THE PALLOR OF HER FACE. She burried her finger nails into the banister and her knuckles turned the same pale white as her face now became.
Granted, none of those examples will ever win a Pulitzer, but maybe they can give you some ideas for varying the first word of sentences from names and pronouns.
IMHO, if the paragraphs all occur in the same scene with the same character, there's no obligation to begin them with the character's name.
Best of luck with your writing.
Good one, Gypsy.
I'm a non-recovering Discworld addict. One of the unique organizations on this world is the "Assassin's Guild. They will, for the proper fee:
inhume
the person or persons the customer selects.
Turns out, inhume, is a 'really' word meaning just what you think it would.
I'm a non-recovering Discworld addict. One of the unique organizations on this world is the "Assassin's Guild. They will, for the proper fee:
inhume
the person or persons the customer selects.
Turns out, inhume, is a 'really' word meaning just what you think it would.
LAMBENT: Adjective
1.(of light or fire) Glowing, gleaming, or flickering with a soft radiance.
2.(of wit, humor, etc.) Lightly brilliant.
Can't recall ever coming across that second definition. The first definition tends to be used in descriptions of lighting conditions at twilight time or in a dim interior.
1.(of light or fire) Glowing, gleaming, or flickering with a soft radiance.
2.(of wit, humor, etc.) Lightly brilliant.
Can't recall ever coming across that second definition. The first definition tends to be used in descriptions of lighting conditions at twilight time or in a dim interior.
Hum, I always thought 'quaver' was what I did before a root canal. ;)
My word for yesterday, today and the next few to come is:
APOCALYPSE
...as in, 'Updating the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse' a must read musing by me here on Stories Space. BTW, it contains my last WOTD: compasmintus.
...What do you mean that was a blatant display of story pimping. Weren't neither. 'Updating...' is a Musing piece, not a story, that may or may not strike readers as amusing. So there.
My word for yesterday, today and the next few to come is:
APOCALYPSE
...as in, 'Updating the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse' a must read musing by me here on Stories Space. BTW, it contains my last WOTD: compasmintus.
...What do you mean that was a blatant display of story pimping. Weren't neither. 'Updating...' is a Musing piece, not a story, that may or may not strike readers as amusing. So there.
Hum, I always thought 'quaver' was what I did before a root canal. ;)
My word for yesterday, today and the next few to come is:
APOCALYPSE
...as in, 'Updating the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse' a must read musing by me here on Stories Space. BTW, it contains my last WOTD: compasmintus.
...What do you mean that was a blatant display of story pimping. Weren't neither. 'Updating...' is a Musing piece, not a story, that may or may not strike readers as amusing. So there.
My word for yesterday, today and the next few to come is:
APOCALYPSE
...as in, 'Updating the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse' a must read musing by me here on Stories Space. BTW, it contains my last WOTD: compasmintus.
...What do you mean that was a blatant display of story pimping. Weren't neither. 'Updating...' is a Musing piece, not a story, that may or may not strike readers as amusing. So there.
In a day or two I'm going to submit my first-ever 'Musing' piece. With luck, it will contain the following word:
compasmentis
...that's assuming it still applies to me. ;)
note to Maggie: Aw shucks, Ms Maggie, those folks are just saying what the rest of us have known all along...no, really...I'm being VERY serious...honest. RdW
compasmentis
...that's assuming it still applies to me. ;)
note to Maggie: Aw shucks, Ms Maggie, those folks are just saying what the rest of us have known all along...no, really...I'm being VERY serious...honest. RdW
I wish a blessing on Aries for endorsing my earlier wish back on page three. ;)
And for those who fell asleep in Sunday School and couldn't grok her reference to, Matthew 7:5, here's the King James Version: Thou hypocrite, first cast out the beam out of thine own eye;and then shalt thou see clearly to cast out the mote out of thy brother's eye.
All these wishes reminded me of one of the all-time great put-downs in some Bob Dylan lyrics:
"I wish that for just one time you could stand inside my shoes, and just for that one moment I could be you.
"Then you'd know what a drag it is to see you."
And for those who fell asleep in Sunday School and couldn't grok her reference to, Matthew 7:5, here's the King James Version: Thou hypocrite, first cast out the beam out of thine own eye;and then shalt thou see clearly to cast out the mote out of thy brother's eye.
All these wishes reminded me of one of the all-time great put-downs in some Bob Dylan lyrics:
"I wish that for just one time you could stand inside my shoes, and just for that one moment I could be you.
"Then you'd know what a drag it is to see you."
Greetings, Drac, and welcome to this scene of old world culture and charm known as, Stories Space.
Considering your bio., you could the the perfect person to help deal with the gay, zombie, killer penguins. (They did tell you about them, didn't they?) No? Well, live and learn...with a heavy emphasis on the 'live' part.
Considering your bio., you could the the perfect person to help deal with the gay, zombie, killer penguins. (They did tell you about them, didn't they?) No? Well, live and learn...with a heavy emphasis on the 'live' part.
The names of characters, especially the major ones, can be crucial. For instance, there's a famous literary/publishing story about a publisher hounding an author to change the first name of her protag. After resisting the idea for weeks, she finally relented at the last minute and agreed to change 'Pansy' to 'Scarlett O'Hara'. .
I've no idea if this book will be worth the time it took to download...but the title was just too much to resist.
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The woman who died a lot: now with 50% added subplot
Forde, Jasper
Mystery and Detective Stories
Fantasy Fiction
Literary detective Thursday Next is hired as head of Swindon's All-You-Can-Eat-at-Fatso's Drink Not Included Library Service instead of her beloved SO-27 unit. The annoyingly perfect Phoebe Smalls--a Thursday wanna-be--gets SO-27. Thursday must also deal with her son Friday's Letter of Destiny, duplicate Thursdays, and assassination attempts. Some violence. 2012.
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The woman who died a lot: now with 50% added subplot
Forde, Jasper
Mystery and Detective Stories
Fantasy Fiction
Literary detective Thursday Next is hired as head of Swindon's All-You-Can-Eat-at-Fatso's Drink Not Included Library Service instead of her beloved SO-27 unit. The annoyingly perfect Phoebe Smalls--a Thursday wanna-be--gets SO-27. Thursday must also deal with her son Friday's Letter of Destiny, duplicate Thursdays, and assassination attempts. Some violence. 2012.
Me, I done got a grammar question.
Bri (354) brought up an item from my 'Cold Beer and Hot Fries' story. Early on, I describe the Hilltop Café interior as being "neon lighted." (might have stuck a hyphen in there) He suggested that "neon lit" would be the correct wording.
Any sage wisdom, counsel and/or advice would be appreciated.
Bri (354) brought up an item from my 'Cold Beer and Hot Fries' story. Early on, I describe the Hilltop Café interior as being "neon lighted." (might have stuck a hyphen in there) He suggested that "neon lit" would be the correct wording.
Any sage wisdom, counsel and/or advice would be appreciated.