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nekala20
Over 90 days ago
Australia
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I totally agree incaendo that was why I asked for help. I didn't think it was mysterious enough but every attempt I made sounded horrible and couldn't seem to get it to sound right no matter what I did. It is for a fantasy/ supernatural story. Thank you for your help it is greatly appreciated.
Advanced Wordsmith
Hello everyone,
I was wondering if I could get some help, I am really stuck on one part of my story "Sweetest Dreams" and I was wondering if anyone could possible help me at all. I am trying to write a prophecy and can't seem to make it sound right so far this is what I have:
The last Lascher princess, will be the first bonded queen,
Great changes will occur under her rule.
She will be marked by an ancient goddess,
Doves and flowers will cover her lower back.
To me it doesn't sound right and I am hoping that someone is to help me in back it better as it a critical part of my story and I can't continue without it. In the story they don't find the prophecy until part of it is already taken place. Please if anyone can help please let me know. I greatly appreciate any help given.
I was wondering if I could get some help, I am really stuck on one part of my story "Sweetest Dreams" and I was wondering if anyone could possible help me at all. I am trying to write a prophecy and can't seem to make it sound right so far this is what I have:
The last Lascher princess, will be the first bonded queen,
Great changes will occur under her rule.
She will be marked by an ancient goddess,
Doves and flowers will cover her lower back.
To me it doesn't sound right and I am hoping that someone is to help me in back it better as it a critical part of my story and I can't continue without it. In the story they don't find the prophecy until part of it is already taken place. Please if anyone can help please let me know. I greatly appreciate any help given.
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