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fifafan
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So, I have an idea for a story I want to tell, but I am very unsure if the format I want to tell it in will be acceptable. Basically I want to tell the story in a 'he said, she said' fashion. It wold look something like this:

Him: Blah blah blah blah

Her: Stuff Stuff Blah Blah Stuff Stuff Blah Things.

And so on and so forth.

Is this just a really bad idea?

Thanks for the insight!

FF
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Michael
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I would avoid using "Him" or "Her" only as it appears more as a script.

I have read a few stories written using only conversation... If done well, it is outstanding; otherwise it is confusing.
These were done with only conversation, no lead in words or identification.

I try to give the reader enough credit that they will understand which character is speaking, while giving them enough information to judge it.
Still if the conversation is bouncing back and forth a lot, it can be confusing for the reader, thus I will try to introduce some reference words such as>

Her eyes suddenly flashed, "You can never do that!"

I did try to write Empty Kitchen using emphasis on dialog, it is challenging.
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VanessaFinaughty
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Personally, I wouldn't read a book/story with only conversation, particularly if there are no dialogue tags. There are very few writers who could pull that off so it isn't totally confusing and/or boring (and for me personally, no action is generally boring), so I'd only read something like that if it was recommended by someone whose opinion mattered or if I had read other work by that writer and enjoyed it (or if it was for work).

My advice to you is to write it the way you want to, then ask a few people to beta read it (before you share it in public) and let them tell you if they think you pulled it off and why/why not. You never know... you may just be one of the few who can write this type of story well, but you will never know unless you try.

If you want to read an example of someone who pulled it off excellently, IMHO, I recommend [url=http://www.vanessafinaughtybooks.co.za/index.php?option=com_kunena&func=view&catid=15&id=2877&Itemid=172&lang=en][i]Genesis [/url]by Bernard Beckett.
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fifafan
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Thanks for the advice! I took a quick peek at a preview of Genesis, and that is exactly the format I am after. I will definitely keep working on this story!
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There are two kinds of people in the world.
Those who like bacon.
And those who are wrong.

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DirtyMartini
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If your story is all dialogue, you can always write it as a short play...just sayin'
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