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The Watered Down Version

Tags: addiction, love, loss,

Saying goodbye and moving on

This story was published in Every Day Fiction in April 2008.

In the watered down version of you, you are merely an acquaintance not the love from my youth. In this version, you are smaller with those thin hands that keep slipping through mine. And, yes, you still speak with a bit of a southern accent, but it’s not smooth or gentle. This voice does not grasp me at once wrapping me in the light that was you. Those sweetheart-baby doll-honey-sugar words are not lingering in the air. No, for you aren’t charming or inviting just lost. I think of you as lost.

And that day, that one day, on the 8th of July, when I found you on the street “Excuse me, oh,” you say, a sweep of finger on my skin, “My, it’s you.”

I was thinking of your touch then, still, your touch has a slight tingle, but I tell myself there is no electricity. No shock really or heat that rises over the goose-bump flesh. And, you can’t speak to me anymore with those gray-green eyes, holding me inside. For today, finally, on this day I can see the black ones, those black eyes, black-black.

Look at you now, ta-da, you are slim, dried up, weak, but my glass is full. I diluted you. I drank it in. Sure, I cheated with a trick but then so did you? You cheated me and yourself didn’t you? You and your edginess, all the slipping-slipping away, glassy-eyed, with the pipe, those needles, your ruins. See, in this watered down version of you, come look, closer, I swallowed you, hard. The memories go down-down-down. It doesn’t burn completely.

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